Paper Reflection.

I need to make sure that i write a good introduction because it is the only part that will make the reader either read it till the end or just stop there. I also need to watch out what words i am using and if i am writing what i mean correctly. In general my paragraph structure is not bad but i still need to improve my skills to write everything correctly and the way i mean it.

Advertisment. Homework due Wednesday.

Introduction.


'Does your airline decide where you can and can't do business?'. The united ad is a reminder ad and based on desire. The logo with its slogan is clearly remarkable on the ad. It will be discussed about the rhetorical (visual and literary) and propaganda devices, that in fact are all under the A.I.D.A. motif, about which it will be talked too.

Body #1.

• What is used to attract attention?
• Attraction is being attracted by the 'cartoon' or drawing included in the ad
• Rule of thirds - business man in the middle of ad - makes it weak, but tells us about the man more

Body #2.

• What is used to develop interest?
• The title in big letters develops interest, which is a rhetorical question at the same time.

Body #3.

• What develops desire?
• The main text develps desire as the audiece starts to read it.
• The words 'flight' and/or 'cities or places' are being repeated, which also develops desire.

Body #4.

• What in the ad moves the audience to action?
• First of all the web link given at the end of the text moves the audience to action and on top of that the slogan might help as it says 'It's time to fly.'. 

Conclusion.

In conclusion, this ad is trying you to desire to fly with their airlines but also or more to make you feel bad and fear about it because the audience automatically thinks about being 'cheated on' as their own airline may not provide what this airline provides them. First it gets your attraction with the 'toy plane' figure, which represents your airline taking you to only few places. Later, with the help of the rhetorical question it gets your interest, following with developing your desire with the text and at the end moving you to action with a web link.

Introduction example for the 'Accenture' ad

Go on. Be a tiger. The Accenture ad is a reminder ad and it advertises consulting. It has a logo and a slogan to make people recognize the ad. In this essay, it will be explained how the ad uses rhetorical devices: visual and literary. It will also describe how the ad uses A.I.D.A. to develop the viewer’s desire the product/idea/service.


( ExampleFrom Rasmuses Blog)

Commercials.

Visual Rhetoric.

-         Colour Theory:

o   A circular diagram in which primary and usually intermediate colours are arranged sequently so that related colours are next to each other and complementary colours are opposite.

o   Mixing primary, secondary and tertiary colours with each other and the involvement of light in their ultimate reflection on the human eye.

o   A body of particular guidance to colour mixing and the visual impacts of specific colour combination.

-         Perspective:

o   A picture drawn in such a way, esp. one appearing to enlarge or extend the actual space, or to give the effect of distance.

o   The relationship of aspects of a subject to each other and the whole.

o   A technique of depicting volumes and spatial relationships on a flat surface.

-         Contrast:

o   The state of being strictly different from something else (black/white) .

o   Opposition of different forms, lines or colours in a work.

o   To set in opposition in order to show or emphasize differences.

-         Hierarchy:

o   Any system of persons or things ranked one above another.

o   Categorization of a group of people according to ability or status.

o   The classification of a group of people according to ability or to economic, social or professional standing.

-         Rule of Thirds:

o   Placing horizons along the horizontal lines on the vertical lines will result a much more balanced image.

o   An imaginary grid drawn across a photo that breaks the image into nine equal squares. The best focal point is at the intersection of these lines with secondary emphasis being seen along them.

o   It states that an image should be imagined as divided into nine equal squares and that important compositional elements should be places along these lines or their intersections.

Homework.

* Desire - because it makes you want to own such a car as it describes it with specific words.
* Informative - because it introduces a new product from a (known) brand to the market.
* Repetition - speed
   Slogan - 'Stop playing Hide and go Seek come out and play with the big kids"
   Exaturation - ?

Sentences and Paragraph

She was given an explicit instruction for her job.

The essay that was written is very implicit.



The Macintosh.
The Macintosh advertisement is based on fear and informative. It is introducing a totally new product to the market while they're scaring the market as they use specific figures, such as the woman with the hammer, who throws the hammer towards the screen and causes serious damage representing the new Macintosh as the huge change in the media. It even says at the end of the advertisement that 1984 won't be like 1986. This tells us that the advertisement is informative, because a new product is being introduced to the market.

Advertisment.

* Desire - because if you own a Sony Ericsson you can be a part of something special that not everyone has
* Reminder - because it introduces a product to the market where the brand is actually established. (?)




* Fear - because so many people die in such cases, which people want to avoid with this add.
* Reminder - because it's been established in the 'market' and is reminding us of the danger. (?)



* Desire - because if you are a Panasonic user, you automatically can shoot great photos.
* Informative - because they're introducing a new product to the market.




* Fear - because Aids is a really dangerous illness, which spreads out easily without people even knowing. And if you get the test you can save lots of lives.
* Reminder - because it reminds us about something that is really important and that is already been established in the market.




Desire - because if you own this product, you can enjoy the 'sound for real'

* Desire - because he drops the gun to save the car, the highlight of the commercial
* Informative - because it introduces a new product to the market.

* Desire - because IKEA's furniture is the best according to the commercial
* Comparative - because it's 'better' than any other furniture

* Fear - because if you drink the probability of harming others is really high
* Reminder - because

* Desire - because even basketball players choose McDonald's
* Reminder - because it talks about a product/brand that is established in the market for a long time.

* Desire and Fear - because it's a special brand and because it helps you to protect your teeth
* Informative - because it introduces a new product of a brand to the market

The Teenage Brain

The teenage brain.

Intro

The teenage brain works not as adults think it does. Many adults may think that there is something wrong with the teenagers, but everything is actually fine. Teenagers are growing and their brain inside them grows with them. It is a big change in the human body, which causes some trouble at these days. However, the REM sleep, how adults think teenagers to be and media will be discussed. First of all the sleep teenagers get is the most important factor in a students’ life.

Body#1

The REM sleep is the most important sleep you teenagers get during night; the time during dreaming and learning. The rapid eye movement, where the eyes literally move while sleeping is the only time when teenagers repeat what they have learned on that day. Although They say teenagers need nine and a half hours of sleep minimum, as teenagers do not necessarily get this sleep, they have less of the REM sleep, which means they don't repeat everything as well. It differs from teenagers to teenagers though how many hours of REM sleep one gets. For example students with a high IQ can get to the REM sleep five minutes after going to bed and some just need more time. Therefore it is important that most of the teenagers go to bed early so that they have enough time to rest and repeat while REM sleeping.

Body#2

Parents cannot recognize their teenaged children anymore. They claim to know their children, while they actually don’t. This happens because teenagers interpret face expressions or emotions differently yo adults because of the frontal cortex that changes with time, that most of the parents don't know about. Research has shown that when an adult feels fear, the teenage may feel anger to the same situation. The frontal cortex that changes with time causes situations like this and makes it hard for parents to understand their children at that time. It is Media would be one of the factors that affect teenagers feelings.

Body#3

Media affects teenagers in many different ways. Although the consumption of media is highly sophisticated. Their behaviours may change in a bad way. For example they might try to do something they saw on the TV, which actually is dangerous and should not be done at home alone. Teenagers are confused and this is normal, as they are still learning. As said, different kinds of media cause teenagers to change in a bad or even good way, which won't happen as often.

Conclusion

The teenage brain is difficult. They are growing and their brain inside grows with them, but this causes a lot of misunderstanding between adults and teenagers. The REM sleep, the change that happens or the media that causes this, are actually things that is even important for the adult. But as the teenage brain in still growing, they might interpret things differently to adults, which the adults may not understand. In conclusion, we still don't know what exactly occurs this misunderstanding between an adult an a teenager. Now our question is, if  the scientists will be successful in finding what the general problem is?

reponse to the artıcle

Stonehill has an incorrect timetable. Stonehill chose to set a timetable that starts early and finishes late. This is wrong. Students can learn better if they have enough time for sleep. This is not possible if you go to Stonehill. After a long school day, students mostly do homework or other projects for school until really late and don't have much time for something else that is important. Research has shown that teenagers can concentrate better in the after noon, which shows that this is the most important factor in a students life. If students begin school late, they will have a higher chance of getting better grades than before. In conclusion, Stonehill should change it's timetable, so that it suits how teenagers can learn better.

For thursday

Write a response to the article on school schedules and teenage sleep patterns.

1 great paragraph explaining why you feel Stonehill should or should not change our timetable in accordance with the research discussed? Do the students here get better or worse at concentrating/learning as the day goes on?

3 paragraph comparison of my article and the article before

Paragraph 1 -- Paragraph about 'How Media Demonises Teenagers'
Paragraph 2 -- Paragraph (The Sun News)


Both articles are about teenagers and their problems at that stage/age. The difference is that paragraph 1 talks more about how media takes place in teenagers lives where paragraph 2 talks about the stereotypes of teenagers as thugs and a menace to others. The meaning is actually the same, where media is the only big thing that can cause changes in teenagers behaviors. By seeing the different TV shows that are about 'bad teenagers' or see other teenagers his age and their behavior they try to imitate them and become as the other teenagers are as they think that what the majority does is right. They might also be confused about anything and don't know what to do, so they do whatever everybody does. This means that media and other teenagers are the only sources for all the 'bad behavior' teenagers show.

Key deas for the short story

1. They say teenagers need nine and a half hours of sleep minimum.
2. Teenager can actually think better in the afternoon.
3. It is true that adults are jealous of teenagers.
4. Adults think that every teenager stole once or more products from a shop.
5. Many people are negative about teenagers and rude to them.
6. They (teenagers) are no lazy sobs.
7. Shouting at teenagers for getting drunk is a simple projection of our own faults on to people we feel we can boss around --> it's not the best way to communicate with teenagers.
8. Teenagers are told to control themselves.
9. Perhaps adults are scared of teenagers.
10. Our teenagers still want, need and deserve our encouragement and admiration.
11. Teenagers themselves give a bad reputation about themselves.
12. Teenagers are confused.

Idioms Story

Jane's Birthday Party

There was a girl named Jane, who couldn’t wait until her eighth birthday party. The party was in two days and she was like a kid in a candy store. She told her mom that she wanted a puppy and a kitten. She was excited about the presents and the big cake. Her birthday was going to be in the garden and four of her friends were invited.
The night before her party when it was time to hit the hay, she didn’t get any sleep. She was too excited about her birthday party. She got dressed in her nicest clothes. Then she helped her mom blow up the balloons and to decorate the whole house.
In the afternoon people started to arrive. Jane was so excited she was over the moon, she ran to the door every time it rang. The first person to arrive was her friend Lisa. Both went up to Jane’s room and started waiting for the rest of the guests.
       

 They played with Jane’s dolls. Lisa got the doll with the brown hair like hers and with blue eyes, and Jane got the doll with the light blonde hair like hers and green eyes. They had a tea party with their dolls and they also played house with them. Soon other friends of hers arrived to the party. This time it was Mia and Mona, and they were sisters. Mona was seven, and Mia was eight. Jane was quick to the trigger and was to the door first. They went upstairs and continued playing with the dolls. This time she heard the doorbell ring, and everyone ran downstairs like headless chickens to see who came.

The person who had arrived was Tina. She had light blue eyes that would take your breath away. They all went up to Jane’s room and started playing a game. Jane was very happy as everyone there was close to her heart.

Mona wanted the blue piece and grabbed it out of Jane’s hands. Jane took it back with an agry look, nor even was it her birthday.

Soon all the girls were fighting about who got the blue piece and after a short time Jane’s mom came up stairs to see who upset the apple cart. She separated the sheep's from the goats and told everyone it was time for cake and ice cream.

While having those, Jane’s mom questioned the girls about what happened. As soon as she found out, she made them say sorry to each other, as they all know that they shouldn’t fight tooth and nail.

Sentences

Lisa contradicted she didn't hurt her sister while playing outside.

Scientists say that aliens are immortal.

The teacher became a good impression from his student who did all of his work for the week.

The surprise birthday party for Emma was vicarious.

Jane was misdemeaned by her friend.

My mom told me to give up my succumb to chocolate.

I'm deluding myself.

Many teenagers are standing face to face with promiscuity.

Words:

Contradiction: To assert the contrary of,  take issue with or to imply the opposite

Immortal:  Unending existence

Impression: A telling image impressed on the senses or the mind

Vicarious: performed or suffered by one person as a substitute for another or to the benefit or advantage of another


Maligned: Evil in disposition, nature, or intent


Tendency: Movement or prevailing movement in a given direction

Paragraph (The Sun News)

http://www.thesun.co.uk/sol/homepage/news/3799197/Conker-mob-stab-student-to-death.html

Teenagers are getting more dangerous from day to day.They start to do things, that they actually would not to, but are kind of forced to do. Other teenagers are playing a big role in how your teenaged child is behaving.We can blame TV shows for showing brutalized movies/shows and make teens watch them. They learn a lot 
from the media and try it in real life, which has a huge negative impact on the society. Another reason is the way the teenagers are being treated by in first place their parents/family and their friends. It is sad to see that parents do not note how they treat or even talk with their children, as the teenagers are in the stage where they change every second and learn from what they see. Problems like these come up just because parents are not empathizing well. To avoid such incidents parents should always be able to communicate the best way they can with their teenaged children.




--> The article in the sun perpetuates the stereotypes of teenagers as thugs and a menace to others.

Paragraph about 'How Media Demonises Teenagers'

Teenage boys don't seem to be as confident as they seem to be.Thanks to the Media, boys these days are more and more wary about their behavior towards teenagers they don't know or never met before to make sure they don't get in trouble as shown in the media. The reason why this is happening is that the media coverage of boys are most likely negative and represents teenage boys as the victims or perpetrators of crime that makes them wary about other teenage boys and think twice before doing something. For example nearly three-quarters of the teenagers said they had changed their behaviour as a result of this wariness. The most common change was boys avoiding places where other teenagers they didn't know hung around. Others included dressing differently and changing who they were seen with. They know too good what's going to happen if they get in trouble, may be just because of his behavior, as the media shows them many examples. As a conclusion, we know that teenage boys wary from other teenage boys they don't officially know and see them mostly as menace.

wary, menace

The boy was wary about the teacher who was a true menace, because he did not do his homework and knew he would get a punishment from the teacher.

Paragraph: 'My Sweet 16'

Is it your sweet 16 soon?
And you have no idea what to do? Then I guess you didn't watch 'My Sweet 16' yet. It is a show where teenagers have their 16th birthday filmed on TV.
Now, even if it seems to be a fun thing to watch it is actually most of the time the total opposite.
First of all, it should be embarrassing to see afterwards what you have done all the time while filming. Teenagers may not think the disadvantages of such a thing and just share every moment on their special birthday, bad and good, in TV with the whole world.
Another point is that those shows may change most of the teenager's think-wise which would lead to trouble with family, friends or even school for example. They are not aware that they can influence every teenager that watches the show in a bad or good way.
However, shows just like 'My Sweet 16' are not the best shows to watch as they reflect teenagers everyday life and problems, who even influences other teenagers in many different ways.

Coke and Fanta Paragraphs

Hook

Introduction

Thesis Statement (main idea)

Example(s) 2 maximum

Explanation (50-70% of paragraph)

Conclusion/link to next paragraph

COCA-COLA

On a hot summer day, you want to be sure of the refreshment you are drinking.

Coca-cola is the world’s number one soft drink for a reason.

Coca-cola is my and most other people’s default drink.

Coke is perfect with pretty much any meal as it is not as sweet as Pepsi for example, so you can drink as much as you want without getting sick of it. You can have Coca-cola for dinner, lunch or some might even drink it for breakfast. It's all your choice.

Coca-cola can be bought all around the world in every market. We all know that no matter in which country you are, if you go in any super market you will be able to find coke. It is well known, and safe to drink other than a brand no one knows about.

As a conclusion, Coca-cola is most other people's default drink as it goes with pretty much any meal and it is available all around the world.

FANTA

Why would you settle for Coke when you can have a more amazing soft drink?

Fanta is more than just one of the most popular drinks in the world.

Fanta is way better than Coke.

The orange flavour makes it more refreshing. When you see the orange colour you get thirsty automatically unlike with Coca-cola. It gives you the knowledge that the refreshing soft drink was made of oranges and is healthy aswell.

And you cannot find any website that says Fanta kills. For most of the consumers it is important to consum a drink that has well known background. If Fanta would have had websites saying it kills people, then the percentage of the consumers all around the world would've dropped, so as you cannot find even one website saying Fanta kills, you know you are drinking a good refreshing drink.

Again, fanta is a better and safer soft drink than Coca- cola as you know from the above examples.

English Homework 6.9.2011 - Formal/Informal Letter

Letter to Mr Spirendio

Dear Mr Spirendio,

Me, as a student at Stonehill International School, from my own experience and from what I have heard from most of my friends is that there is a problem with the ECAs.

We find it very exhausting to have ECAs after school. The reason is that we start school really early compared to most of the other school here in Bangalore and have to leave late. To have ECAs on top of that makes us more and more tired every day and we lose time that we actually could use to either study more or to have more time for ourselves rather than concentrating full on our school life.  I have to admit, it is hard for us students trying to manage our school work, having family time and time for ourselves where we spend time doing activities we like. As we go home late and have a very limited time, we spend most our time for school work and end up going to bed late, which makes us tired and sleepy the next morning. It has no benefits for us, students, and the teachers who have to teach tired and inactive students.

Now, my idea/suggest is that we should have the option to choose what we as students want to do. Either students will chose the ECAs and do it as now or to have the school buses at 2:55 pm for everyone and for those who want to stay for ECAs should provide their own transportation back home. This would be a way out of the problem students report.

I would really appreciate it if you, as the Stonehill International School head master, would try to find a perfect solution that would benefit both, school staff, as in teachers and students.

Elif Kaya.

Letter to friend

Paul, we all have the same problem, don’t we? The ECAs are useless and a waste of our time actually. If we wouldn’t have any ECAs we would’ve had more time in the evenings to do more stuff that has nothing to do with school. Look, we come to school early and then we have all those classes and on top of that the ECAs and we get home late. We spend our whole evening doing homework and other work for school that sometimes we don’t even get enough sleep because we were trying to finish something for the next day. We don’t get enough sleep and are tired at school, which affects again our grades and our school social life. I think we should do something against it. For example we should have the opportunity to choose what we want to do, either go home with the buses at 2:55 or to stay for the ECAs but having our own transport back home. This way students would have more time in the evening and/or get more sleep.  To be active in class I think this is the best solution.

First Response

I've read one third of the book.